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Post by Enoshi Hitake on Thu Dec 15, 2011 12:15 am


Name: (Your char's full name.) Enoshi Hitake
Nickname/Alias: Enoshi Hitake
(A to S rank Village shinobi or Missing Ninja only.)
Age: 16
Gender: Male
Looks:

Enoshi has light blue hair with fair light skin. Has a mist symbol tattooed on his back. Before leaving his father's home in the night of his death, Enoshi took his father's kimono with his family name embroided onto it. He grabbed his fathers special combat gloves and his fathers prayer beads. The only thing he took of his mothers was her blue hair and eyes, given to him at birth. With his clan ability his eyes can imitate his lightning dominate element. When he is truly enraged or happy, his eyes glow solid white, and have been said to be the most beautiful light in the mist village. Enoshi is very healthy and finds this to be lucky, because most people in his clan have been said to be quite frail, and fragile, but as his father asked god at his birth, for Enoshi to grow strong and worthy, it seemed to have come true.

Personality: As the night comes, my mind finds places to dwell, within its space to find resolutions on my role in this place. How fitting would it be. How soothing for the breeze to pick up and carry me, into the never ending spirals of god.. People around the Mist village never fully understood Enoshi, partly due the fact that he was always focused on becoming a strong ninja like his father, whom seemed to always get out of dangerous situations. Enoshi is a very silent person who doesn't show any real interest in people. He can usually be found writing poetry or playing the piano in a special room made of such a strong lightning chakra that the shack is void of sound. Now at 16 years of age and witnessing the death of his family, Enoshi is extremely depressed and unstable. He lives his days, day by daye hoping his revenge will be taken soon.
Likes & Dislikes: Chakra blades, piano dislikes those he perceives to be evil.
Catch Phrase: let this light fill your eyes, and know that this is the hiss of the Serpents Tongue.




Clan Name: Magure
Kekkei Genkai: Enshi (遠視) : Enshi (遠視) : This ability typically means far sight and is a passive ability that can be used as will. This is the primary ability for members of this clan. The ability known as Enshi entails those members of this clan can focus in and see incredible farther than the average human being. Members of this clan have eyes that can fix in on anything or things up to 1000 meters away (approximately as high as a jet plan can elevate) and see things in that area with clear vision. This clear vision works despite the conditions wither it be natural conditions or conditions caused by jutsu such as the hidden mist jutsu. This technique doesn’t necessarily mean that members of this clan have eye balls popping out of their heads, or that they can’t see anything close up. It simply means that they can extend their vision at well. Because of this ability, members of this clan have outstanding peripheral vision, allowing them 360 degree vision on everything that is 10 ft from them. When using Enshi’s ability of far sight, members of this clan will lose 1ft of their 10ft -360 peripheral vision for every 100 meters used. If they max out at 10k meters they will no longer be able to see anything coming from behind them or at the side of them, until they decrease their range in vision. This ability serves well in battle because users will be able to see attacks coming from in front, the sides, and from behind for up to 10 ft around them, but it is up to their own capabilities to spot attacks coming from above or underground. This technique helps them rp wise because they will be able to spot enemies from a far, as long as nothing is obstructing their view(such as trees or whatever).

Kanpekina shotto (完璧なショット): This technique roughly means “perfect shot”. This ability is the secondary ability for members of this clan and was said to have been one of goods only blessings to the hunters of this clan. This blessing is what we mostly refer to as luck or even dumb luck, but for the hunters of this clan, its known as a “perfect shot”. Members of this clan are known to be undoubtedly lucky all the time. People whom would follow up on members of this clan would note extremely lucky events such as a giant tree branch breaking from a tree and barely missing a member of this clan because that member had sneezed and buggers came out and while stringing the buggers out he/she moved a few steps and barely missed the falling branch. At first followers just thought that it was dumb luck, but as lucky situations kept happening, spectators judged this as divine help. This doesn’t necessarily mean that members of this clan will always dodge death or will never find themselves unfortunate. This just means that in their life time, members of this clan will have experienced more luck than the average human, and the one activity that members do in which their luck never falters is shooting. This ability has it that no matter what conditions are supposed upon a member of this clan, that as long as they can see their target and fire(throw things or shoot things), that the shot will always hit the target so long as the target is still there, even if it was a sloppy shot. The only exception being that the target was protected by some kind of force in which would prevent this hunter from making contact with the target, unless the hunter had taken precautions to see around that situation. Ex: Ninja 1 is in a rain storm, and spots a pig, this pig spots the Ninja, this ninja is startled and throws a shuriken aiming for the pig’s neck. Chances are the shot will miss because the ninja was startled and threw the weapon out of impulse and the winds of this storm are blowing hard, if the pig doesn’t completely move out of the way, the shuriken will definitely hit the designated spot. EX2: Same situation, but this time the pig uses wind repellent jutsu, that protects him from incoming projectiles, the shuriken will still go to the designated spot, but will not hit the pig because the pig was protected and the shuriken couldn’t go through. Now if he had enforced the shuriken with a wind cutting technique to keep wind element jutsu from being used as a shield, then the pig will be hit in the designated area if it doesn’t move out of the way completely in time. This technique does not mean that the target will be auto hit, this only means that the weapon will always go where it needs to go, so long as the person with this ability can see and fire at the opponent. Now if the opponent does nothing valid to counter, dodge, or repel this weapon then it will count as a hit, in the hunter’s next response post.

Magure Waltz: Members of the clan (MAGURE) are naturally faster than the average person. This pertains to their reflexes; which includes faster responsiveness in battle, quicker thinking, and the ability to be lighter on their feet.


Faster responsiveness: During battle, member of the clan has the privilege of having faster reaction time than the opponent.
Ex. Say a member of the clan and another Shinobi are battling; for the sake of the situation, let’s say the first two posts consist of them forming hand signs. By the third post, the clan member is able to release the attack spontaneously right after completion of the hand signs, as opposed to the other shinobi, who must naturally wait a second or two for their attack to unleash. However, this ability has a cool down period of 5 posts and cannot under any circumstance be used until that cool down session is complete.
Battle Ex: Player 2 being a Magure clan member
P1: Performs Hand seals
P2: Performs Hand seals as well
P1: Sees that player two is performing hand seals but while player two started his set of handseals, I had finished mine. “ High Speed Fire Ball Jutsu” , I shout as this fire ball speeds towards player two at such blinding speeds.
P2: Had started his hand seals later than player one, but due to the ability of the Magure walts he was able to complete his hand seals before his opponent and send forth his high speed fire ball jutsu before player 1 could finish his hand seals and complete the technique. This ability can not be used for another 5 posts after this one. Player 2 stands there a bit tired from the adrenaline rush, and readies himself for his opponent’s response.


Quicker Thinking: The ability to think rationally and quickly under extreme duress; greater analytical skills. The ability to have great perception of what is real and illusion

Common Ex. Allows the clan member to break out of a genjutsu or binding technique. Can be used only once per battle and when in a moderately fatigue state
Lighter on their feet: Self-explanatory. This part of the Magure Waltz gives clan member the ability to be quicker and lighter on their feet. In result, allowing clan members to even glide/surf over surfaces (Water, magma, thorns, etc). Members of this clan can glide/surf over these surfaces with no damage done, so long as their feet is still moving, keeping them a few inches off of the surface, regardless of what kind of surface.

Ex. Increased speed, Gliding, Ice Skating like motion

Clan Symbol: http://illiweb.com/fa/pbucket.gif
Clan Jutsu: Name: Hand Speed
Rank: E
Type: Clan
Element:-----
Range: Self
Description: This technique utilizes the Magure Walts’ ability of fast responsiveness to grant the user the ability to perform a handseal, complete it and use its corresponding technique in the same post. This means that Magure clan members will not have to wait for their next post for their jutsu to activate. This technique can only be used if Fast responsiveness is ready to be used(meaning not in a cool down state) and will increase the cool down for Fast responsiveness to 8 posts every time this technique is used. This technique does not require hand signs to use, since it is a supplementary technique.

Name: Saving Grace
Rank: E
Type: Clan
Element: -----
Range: Self
Description: This passive technique goes back to the fact that members of this clan are faster, but a bit more fragile than the average person. This allows the user to go into a hyper mode, in which can only be triggered when the clan member is in a state of danger that is life threatening or can cause severe damage to the user of this technique. This hyper mode increases all of the user’s capabilities and allows the user to completely dodge any and all attack that can prove fatal or critical so long as the technique itself isn’t something inescapable (like a technique that blows up an entire island), and/or rescue someone else from a similar situation. This technique does not require hand signs but has a cool down of ten posts. This technique is said to be the lucky part of being a Magure clan member. Opponents whom have had the privilege of seeing such luck say that it wasn’t luck but a giant angelic spirit that had engulfed their body and spared them.

Name: Magure Predator Mode
Rank: E-S
Type: Clan
Element: Dependent on the users primary element
Range: Self
Description: The users skin pigmentation is changed into the color that is representative of their element (Light hue of orange for fire, light hue of blue for water, white for lightning, an earthly green for Earth, and a light hue of teal for wind) and patterns form on the users body (Wave like patterns for water, spiraled patterns for wind, blue cracks for lightning, thorn like patterns for Earth, and dark red tiger scratch patterns for fire.) This technique can be activated or canceled at will, lasts 5 posts, and has a cool down period of 10 posts
Techniques and disadvantages of Magure Predator Mode:
Main technique: User can infuse element with weapon
Disadvantage: Cannot infuse too much of the element into the weapon or it will destroy it and damage the user.

Fire) Techniques: Hot skin- Opponent can be burned when making contact with user’s skin
Heat tolerance- Can withstand intense levels of heat. Cannot withstand fire completely, but as the user grows stronger so does the tolerance
Can shoot fire from the palm of their hands- Heat damage is dependent on user’s level

Disadvantages: Higher intolerance to water: User receives significantly more damage to water than usual
Cannot create lava, only fire: User can only produce fire
Water) Techniques: Breathe underwater- Can breathe underwater as long as the user remains in this form
Tolerance to underwater pressure- Can withstand intense pressure underwater. Higher level = Higher tolerance
Water jutsus are increased two fold- Water jutsu power is doubled

Disadvantages: Higher intolerance to lightning: Lightning attacks do more damage to the user
Fragile: User is weaker to physical attacks

Lightning) Techniques: Quicker reflexes- Quicker evasion skills, and quicker reaction time
Paralysis- Can cause temporary immobility and numbness
Lightning rod- Can absorb lightning/lightning attacks and release it

Disadvantages: Jutsus require 20% more chakra- User is drained of more chakra when performing a jutsu
Fatigue: Causes one post of fatigue after use of lightning Magure

Earth) Techniques: Super strength- Users physical strength is tripled
High tolerance to physical damage- Physical damage done to the user is halved
Dig- User can burrow deeply into the earth
Can create walls of sediment and rock- User creates a shield by stomping the ground. Height, width, and strength of the wall are determined by the level of the user

Disadvantages: Takes higher Ninjutsu damage- Weak to Ninjutsu attacks
High intolerance to lightning, moderately intolerant to fire: Weak to lightning based attacks, moderately weak to fire based attacks
Slower: The user can only use half of their normal speed; body weight is doubled
Wind) Techniques: Heightened senses- Users sense of hearing are drastically heightened
Trajectory change- Can change the trajectory of projectile weapons

Can jump to great heights- User can jump very high and without harming themselves (E rank- 15 meters, D rank- 30 meters, C rank- 45 meters, B rank- 60 meters, A rank- 75 meters, S rank- 90 meters)

Wind blast- Can blast wind from hands and feet. Force is determined by level

Disadvantages: High fire damage- Very weak to fire
Weak to sound- Weak to sound based attacks due to heightened sense of hearing
Weak to physical attacks- Weak to Taijutsu based moves

Name: Spiritual Heat
Rank: E
Type: Clan
Element: ------
Range: Self
Description: This technique is a passive jutsu which uses the user’s chakra to keep their body temperature from reaching dangerous heights or dangerous lows. The only exception to this technique is if the user uses Magure Predator Mode.

Name: Curved shot
Rank: D
Type: Clan
Element: -------
Range: As far as the projectile is thrown
Description: This technique does not require hand signs and allows the user to curve projectile weapons at the last minute. This technique can be used to send a kunai that has already missed, curving back at the target up to 10 meters. This technique lasts one post and has a cool down of three.

Name: Ricocheting Weapons
Rank: C
Type: Clan
Element: -------
Range: As far as the weapon goes
Description: This technique does not require hand signs and allows the user to infuse weapons with a thin layer of chakra. This will then allow the weapon to gain enough force to break a tree, and /or once or many times ricochet off of any surface to hit the designated target at strange angles. This technique lasts one post and has a cool down of three.

Name: Dying Star
Rank: B
Type: Clan
Element: -----
Range: 50 meter radius
Description: Dying Star: User focuses and creates a dense mass of chakra with a strong gravitational pull, attracting any nearby debris and metallic objects. The ball then floats above the user, implodes, and then bursts in a fiery explosion of energy and debris. The attacks accuracy is dependent on the opponent’s natural gravitational force on their body, so if the opponent were to have unnatural gravitational force acting upon their body, the accuracy of the technique would be affected.

Name: Guardian Angel
Rank: A
Type: Ninjutsu
Element: -----
Range: Self
Description: User creates a barrier that takes the form of an Angel. The Angel covers the user and or designated person with its wings. This technique lasts three posts, but prevents the user from moving the entire time; has a cool down period of 5 posts


Name: Fallen Angel
Rank: S
Type: Clan
Element: ---------
Range: 0 -50 meters
Description: This technique requires hand seals. After completing the required seals, the user will have summoned his guardian angel, which will engulf the user and emanate of the user as a giant angel made of chakra. The user will then have the option of either keeping the monstrous angel around him or manifests the angels chakra into a weapon. There are three ways to execute this technique. One could be by making physical contact with the target; once physical contact is made the angel will instantly engulf the target and trap the target within its body. After doing such the angel will rise 70 meters above ground and then drop all the way to the bottom, upon hitting any surface this angel will explode with the target inside of it, causing a large 100 meter S ranked explosion. This technique can be done also with weapons, in which the weapon will have to make contact with the opponent to do the capture/explosion process. Finally this technique can be fired from the user’s body to grab the opponent. This can only go up to 50 meters, but cannot cause harm to those that they wish to protect. After using this technique, one will be very tired and unable to use any clan jutsu for five posts.

Clan History: Magure clan members are descendants from two proud families from two proud countries. The Magure clan is the product of a farmer boy for the royal family of Spain named Heusen and a high ranked shinobi of the Blazing Moon clan, Yuzuki . Yuzuki was an elite shinobi whom was arranged to marry with the handsome warrior of her clan, but during an unusual mission to Spain she met the farmer boy who swept her off her feet. The two returned to japan, but didn’t return to her homeland, instead they ran away to start their own family. Yuzuki’s father wanted the bloodline of his clan to go one through her children and he believed that if the two best warriors have children, that their children are destined for greatness. In honor of her father she attempted to keep the bloodline moving along, but with Heusen, a man with no bloodline. Years later, trouble comes to paradise when Heusen fails his many attempts to get Yuzuki pregnant. Yuzuki contemplates going back to her father, and Heusen drops to his knees and prayed. A few tries later Yuzuki is pregnant, and all is well for a little while. 11 months later they had a beautiful baby boy and named him Kigoshi Hitake. On Kigoshi’s first birthday he fell seriously ill, and no matter what Yuzuki and Heusen did, Kigoshi was going to die. In desperation Heusen being a man of faith fell to his knees and offered his final prayer, and then he slit his own throat right in front of baby Kigoshi. A few hours later Yuzuki walks in to find her love lying on the floor lifeless. In tears she raged, as her judgement began to grow cloudy. She contemplated killing Kigoshi but for some reason , that seems strange to her, she didn’t. Yuzuki would then abandon Kigoshi in a house alone, with his severe illness. A day later Kigoshi is found by a Farmer lady, who had less experience than any medic. This farmer lady took Kigoshi and showered him in green herbs, and after two days under her care Kigoshi made a full recovery. Kigoshi grew up to be a strong and respected ninja of the mist village, but rumor has it that he is an extremely lucky man, but some of his enemies along with the farmer lady who raised him say that its his father Heusen serving as his guardian angel. Kigoshi fathered three children in his lifetime : Aiden, Kaizo, and Enoshi. He believes that his father watches over them as well.





Village: ( Kiri)
Village Rank: (chuunin)
Skill Rank: (B)




Skill Specialty:
Main: Ninjutsu
Sub: weaponry

Elemental Affinity:
Main: lighting
Sub:
Tertiary:

Special Characteristics:

Flaws/Weaknesses:





Name: katana
Appearance: Blade of 5 feet long with a beautiful black guard along with 2 metal infused clothes on the bottom to help keep from rusting. Has a hollow 2 feet line in the middle of the blade for parry abilities, and for faster movement through air. Can harness the abilities of his jutsus, to make it adaptable (lightning).Sword can also be manipulated with lighting jutsu. (Serpents Tongue)
Rank: B rank
Special Abilities: Katana can harness the abilities of my jutsus, to make it adaptable. Blade can cut through most materials other than metals.
Origin:[/b Was forged by Enoshi’s father Kigoshi, during a retreat in the mist mountains. Enoshi was given the sword from his father on his deathbed.)



[b]Name:
Serpents Tongue
Rank: B
Type: (Ninjutsu, Weaponry)
Element: (Lightning)
Range: (20 feet)
Description: Serpents Tongue, is a ninjutsu attack that hurdles a fierce lighting strike from either hands, or Katana. This attack works especially well in rainy conditions. (Obviously because its lighting and water.) (do the math) This lighting attack can be driven through most materials, other than metals.
this attack last 1 post after it is activated. It can be shot up to (20) feet accurately.

Name: Gods Remorse
Rank: B
Type: (Ninjutsu)
Element: lightning
Range: (20 feet)
Description: Hells fountain is a jutsu that obtains the power of lightning to create a waterfall effect that spews out of the users mouth, and into the sky. This causes heating effects in the air. The actual projectile is a mixture of chalra and lightning element seeking out a foreign chakra or person.. This creates small superheated sparks the size of raindrops to fall slowly down to the ground burning at very high temperatures. Since this chakra is Enoshi's it is repelled from his body and will not harm him. If any happens to fall on him then it will instantly extinguish itself. This lightning since mixed with lightning chakra will melt through most materials. This jutsu lasts for 2 posts after it is activated. 20 feet surrounding area is effected.

History: Born in an unknown location. Enoshi was trained from childhood to do physical exercise, and to be a very quick learner. His father created a sword that could be used alongside jutsus, the Hitake family name grew. During his teens Enoshi Hitake learned his fathers lighting jutsu, Serpents Tongue making his father very proud.
During his time in recuperation, from a training injury. Enoshi became much closer to his father and to a childhood friend by the name of Siera. At the age of 16 enoshi fell deeply in love with Siera and confessed his intentions to her. She kindly and happily accepted, and they shared a deep connection. One night during Enoshi’s training a bright light shined through the mist forest revealing a gruesome scene.. His father and mother lying on the ground with a shared fate. His mother choking on her blood as she lie dying, and his father confessing his sorrows to her. Enoshi grasped his mother close and kissed her cheek, and watched her fall into a sleep that would never end. He carried his father into what was left of his home, and begged for his recovery. His father smiled and handed him the sword, telling Enoshi “take this my son, and go seek truth. Let those who need to know, see your Serpents Tongue and bring them to their knees.” As his father said the last words, his hands fell softly to the ground and he showed a kind smile…. As Enoshi stood up, he heard a sharp piercing noise and immedialty sensed danger. Avoiding certain death, he jumped high into the air, performing an elegant yet, hasty backflip into the tree line, where he then took cover.
His heart beating faster and faster, Bawling as he pulled a kunia from his ribs. Seconds later a voice stumbling above the crackling of the fires called forth."Enoshi He...lp ME.." His eyes grew wide and, his mouth fell open. It was his love Siera. She was strung up by hooks placed in her back high above a wooden post. Enoshi quickly without hesitation ran to her to free her. But as he ran closer he heard those words he will never forget. "FIREBALL JUTSU" A loud and fast ball of fire 30 feet wide and 40 feet tall hurdled into the direction of Siera. Enoshi's mind, not even fast enough to comprehend what had happened, slowly realized that she was nothing more than a pile of burnt flesh. Enoshi turned quickly, full of an anger he had never known before, and saw a man with a headband wrapped around his thigh. And wearing a mask of white, with a katana in one hand and, forming signs with the other. As enoshi raised his fathers sword up against this unknown man, he charged letting out a fierce yell "HOW DARE YOU!! I'll SEND YOU TO HELL!!" As Enoshi ran toward this man he forgot all of his training and was blinded with anger, and sadness. As he struck the mans sword, watching sparks flying from his blade. He crouched with swift speed in an attempt, to trip the man, But as he crouched the figure seemed to have vanished before his eyes. And again those words wrang out "FIREBALL JUTSU" as Enoshi turned his face to see this wall of what could only be described as his death. He quickly weaved a sign with his hands and a wall of soil and dirt was summoned from the ground, blocking the fireball. Enraged with even more anger Enoshi jumped the wall, and as he fell toward the man, he weaved the one handed Serpents Tongue jutsu electrifying his sword with beautiful aggressive light. He grabbed the mans collar, shoving the sword deep within his chest yelling. "SERPENTS TONGUE!!" As he yelled his techniques name, his chakra poured into his sword, and made his electricity hotter than fire, and instantly burned the mans lungs to a crisp. When the bright light of his Serpents Tongue died off, time stood still. Enoshi stared deep into the eyeholes of the man's mask with tears running down his face.
As he pulled his sword from the man's chest, the masked figure fell dead spraying blood from his mouth. Enoshi reached down to reveal the face of the man who killed his family. But as he did he heard a "tick tock tick tock tick tock" and saw flashing red lights, coming from the dead mans vest. Before Enoshi could move the mans body exploded with great force, throwing Enoshi's lifeless body and sword into the woods.. Enoshi awoke in a home 4 days later with minor burns, and his kunia wound all bandaged. An old women came to his side and handed him his sword and a mask. Enoshi confused said "How did i get here? Am i dead?" the women replied "far from it young man.You received minor 2nd degree burns on your face and chest but, i made a cream for you that cured it right up." "But that kunia wound is a different story, that will take some time to heal." Enoshi then remembered all that had happened on that night, and began to cry. He then realized that she handed him that mans mask. So as he peered inside of it, he found a paper. On it was a stamp and a statement stating "kill the sword maker Kigoshi Hitake, and anyone who sees you do it." Now left with a mask of the man who murdered his family and proof of his employer. After getting permission from the Misugake. Enoshi left all he knew behind to find the one responsible for killing his family. And to show his Serpents Tongue to those who are truly wicked..
RP Sample:
Born in an unknown location. Enoshi was trained from childhood to do physical exercise, and to be a very quick learner. His father created a sword that could be used alongside jutsus, the Hitake family name grew. During his teens Enoshi Hitake learned his fathers lighting jutsu, Serpents Tongue making his father very proud.
During his time in recuperation, from a training injury. Enoshi became much closer to his father and to a childhood friend by the name of Siera. At the age of 16 enoshi fell deeply in love with Siera and confessed his intentions to her. She kindly and happily accepted, and they shared a deep connection. One night during Enoshi’s training a bright light shined through the mist forest revealing a gruesome scene.. His father and mother lying on the ground with a shared fate. His mother choking on her blood as she lie dying, and his father confessing his sorrows to her. Enoshi grasped his mother close and kissed her cheek, and watched her fall into a sleep that would never end. He carried his father into what was left of his home, and begged for his recovery. His father smiled and handed him the sword, telling Enoshi “take this my son, and go seek truth. Let those who need to know, see your Serpents Tongue and bring them to their knees.” As his father said the last words, his hands fell softly to the ground and he showed a kind smile…. As Enoshi stood up, he heard a sharp piercing noise and immedialty sensed danger. Avoiding certain death, he jumped high into the air, performing an elegant yet, hasty backflip into the tree line, where he then took cover.
His heart beating faster and faster,he then pulled a kunia from his ribs and heard a voice stumbling above the crackling of the fires."Enoshi He...lp ME.." His eyes grew wide and, his mouth fell open. It was his love Siera. She was strung up by hooks placed in her back high above a wooden post. Enoshi quickly without hesitation ran to her to free her. But as he ran closer he heard those words he will never forget. "FIREBALL JUTSU" A loud and fast ball of fire 30 feet wide and 40 feet tall hurdled into the direction of Siera. Enoshi's mind, not even fast enough to comprehend what had happened, slowly realized that she was nothing more than a pile of burnt flesh. Enoshi turned quickly, full of an anger he had never known before, and saw a man with a headband wrapped around his thigh. And wearing a mask of white, with a katana in one hand and, forming signs with the other. As enoshi raised his fathers sword up against this unknown man, he charged letting out a fierce yell "HOW DARE YOU!! I'll SEND YOU TO HELL!!" As Enoshi ran toward this man he forgot all of his training and was blinded with anger, and sadness. As he struck the mans sword, watching sparks flying from his blade. He crouched with swift speed in an attempt, to trip the man, But as he crouched the figure seemed to have vanished before his eyes. And again those words wrang out "FIREBALL JUTSU" as Enoshi turned his face to see this wall of what could only be described as his death. He quickly weaved a sign with his hands and a wall of soil and dirt was summoned from the ground, blocking the fireball. Enraged with even more anger Enoshi jumped the wall, and as he fell toward the man, he weaved the one handed Serpents Tongue jutsu electrifying his sword with beautiful aggressive light. He grabbed the mans collar, shoving the sword deep within his chest yelling. "SERPENTS TONGUE!!" As he yelled his techniques name, his chakra poured into his sword, and made his electricity hotter than fire, and boiled this mans lungs to a crisp. When the bright light of his Serpents Tongue died off, time stood still. Enoshi stared deep into the eyeholes of the man mask with tears running down his face.
As he pulled his sword from the man's chest, the man fell dead spraying blood from his mouth. Enoshi reached down to reveal the face of the man who killed his family. But as he did he heard a "tick tock tick tock tick tock" and saw flashing red lights, coming from the dead mans vest. Before Enoshi could move the mans body exploded with great force, throwing Enoshi's lifeless body and sword into the woods.. Enoshi awoke in a home 4 days later with minor burns, and his kunia wound all bandaged. An old women came to his side and handed him his sword and a mask. Enoshi confused said "How did i get here? Am i dead?" the women replied "far from it young man.You received minor 2nd degree burns on your face and chest but i made a cream for you that cured it right up." "but that kunia wound is a different story, that will take some time to heal." Enoshi then remembered all that had happened on that night, and began to cry. He then realized that she handed him that mans mask. So as he peered inside of it, he found a paper. On it was a stamp and a statement stating "kill the sword maker Kigoshi Hitake, and anyone who sees you do it." Now left with a mask of the man who murdered his family and proof of his employer. After getting permission from the Misukage. Enoshi left all he knew behind to find the one responsible for killing his family. And to show his Serpents Tongue to those who are truly wicked..


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Re: Enoshi Hitake

Post by Suijin on Mon Dec 19, 2011 6:21 pm

First of all, if you're looking to be a Jounin I expect more out of your appearance and a LOT more out of your personality. Your RP Sample is more of a 'history' than an actual sample and even then I'm not sure if you should be Jounin. I could probably look past it if you add more to your appearance and personality but I suggest you apply for Chuunin or Genin instead. It'd better suit you as Jounin are going to be targeted more than the lower ranks and you need to be ready to defend yourself.

You also have one too many elements. As a Jounin, you would only be allowed two elements but you have listed three. Please remove one element along with everything on your application that uses that element. I also noticed that you only have one jutsu, it worries me a little.

I really, really suggest you apply for Chuunin or Genin. lol.
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Re: Enoshi Hitake

Post by Nuitari Kouga on Tue Dec 20, 2011 7:37 pm


Flaws/Weaknesses:
His disinterest in others, so that he can achieve his revenge. Gets lonely but knows his road is a dangerous one.
These are not flaws these would be personality traits. A flaw is something your character has no control of, these things can change throughout rping.

Also i want you to check all jutsu and make sure that any jutsu that last longer than the post it was used it (meaning the initial post of activation) provide a duration period. And make sure all jutsu that are distanced based have a distance in the description of the jutsu.
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Re: Enoshi Hitake

Post by Suijin on Wed Dec 21, 2011 3:00 am

Approved as he has fixed everything I requested over the chatbox. Razz
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